The Mystery

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 17; the seventeenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.

Niki was a little nervous about tonight’s dinner party. Three of her closest friends were coming over. She hadn’t met them in a long time and wanted everything to be perfect. She started with cleaning her tiny apartment.

As she fluffed the pillows on the couch, she noticed something between the cushions. Thinking it was the remote, she reached down to pick it up when it started ringing. Startled, Niki stared at the phone and stepped back for a brief second. Then reached down and picked it up. It stopped ringing.

Perplexed by this unknown cell phone, she stared at the dark black instrument. She turned it over. It was a Nokia. She was baffled. She wondered whose phone this was. She didn’t have anyone in her apartment for over a month. So who put it there and when?

As the phone rang again, the screen read, ‘unknown number.’
“Obviously!” she said resignedly then hit the green button, “Hello..”
“Someone coming over tonight will try to kill you” the deep voice on the other end of the phone said, “Good luck!”
“Who is this? Karan, is this you?” Niki asked, but heard nothing. The person on the other end had already hung up. She dropped the phone back on the couch and stared blankly at it.

She tried to shrug it off as a crank call but was visibly shaken by it. She stood in the middle of her apartment with the oddest look on her face and studied every nook and corner of the room wondering if she was being watched. Slowly and nervously she walked towards the drawing room window and closed the blinds and drew the curtains. Her apartment was on the 10th floor but she still felt uneasy with the open blinds.

The phone started ringing again. She had almost decided not to answer it but something of an instinct made her pick up the phone.
“Who is this?” she demanded with what she thought was a strong voice.
“Shutting your blinds Niki won’t keep you from dying tonight,” said the deep voice “They’re still coming over for dinner tonight, don’t forget!”
“What are you talking about? Who’s trying to kill me?”
“That’s for you to find out!” laughed the caller “Good luck Niki.”
“Wait, wait don’t hang up. Hello, Hello…!”

The line was dead. So he knew her name. This call was meant for her. She rushed to the window, pushed the blinds aside and stared out of the window looking for some sign. She couldn’t see anyone suspicous. She walked around to her kitchen, opened her fridge and took a swing from the water bottle. She carried the bottle and walked back to the couch where she sat with her feet up and reasoned why anyone would want to kill her and what she would do about it.

When the clock struck 5 pm, Niki was revived from her deep thought. She went to the kitchen and started cooking. A few hours later, Niki finished with the dinner. She set the table, plates, glasses, wine. As she put down the last spoon on the table she opened the bottle of Chianti and poured a glass for herself, then dumped various substances back into the bottle and proceeded to seal it up.

The cell rang again, this time Niki picked it up with confidence.
“What!” she barked into the phone.

“Let the game begin!” the deep voice said.

Niki smiled cooly, then tossed the phone on the couch. Just then the doorbell rang. One by one her friends walked into her drawing room. She poured everyone a glass of wine and they toasted to a long lasting friendship. And then one by one, Niki’s friends collapsed to the floor. Niki stared. Then she went over each one of them and looked at their lying forms. Which one of you, she wondered smiling slyly.

Just then she heard a faint knock on the door. She walked to the front door and peeped. Looking at the person on the other side of the door, she became ecstatic. She flinged open the door and stepped into her brother’s open arms. She cried with joy and hugged him for a long moment.

“What are you doing here?” she asked.
“I came to play the murder mystery game, remember? I’ve been calling you all afternoon.” he said.
“That was you?”
“Ya-ha dumbo”
“Oh – my – God!” Niki turned and starred at the bodies on the floor.

“Can I have my phone back please?” Karan asked.

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41 responses to “The Mystery

  1. Someone Is Special December 3, 2010 at 7:28 pm

    I liked the mystery, nicely done, game.. nice.. All the Best for BAT..

    Stop by,Someone is Special – The Mysery

    –Someone is Special–

    • Maddie December 5, 2010 at 11:38 am

      Thanks 🙂 All the best to you too!

  2. Adarsh Sharma December 3, 2010 at 9:47 pm

    this was scary…really scary!!

    • Maddie December 5, 2010 at 11:39 am

      Thanks Adarsh! 🙂

  3. Sadiya December 4, 2010 at 6:15 am

    awesome, unpredictable n very neatly done! 🙂

    • Maddie December 5, 2010 at 11:39 am

      Thanks Sadiya, glad you liked it 🙂

  4. Vibhuti B December 4, 2010 at 9:15 am

    LOL. I hope she has just drugged them and not poisoned them?
    What began as a horror story ends a prank!!!
    Neat idea…ATB for BAT 17

    • Maddie December 5, 2010 at 11:40 am

      Vibhuti, whether she just drugged them or killed them is still a mystery 🙂

  5. Rumya December 4, 2010 at 10:26 am

    As Vibzz has correctly put it, please let it be just a prank and nothing more… 😦
    Not worth killing your friends for a crank call.
    The police can handle that…they are awesome at investigations, you know?? 😉
    All the Best for BAT 17.

    • Maddie December 5, 2010 at 11:41 am

      Yeah Rumya, but as I said, it is still a mystery whether she killed them 🙂

  6. bedazzled December 5, 2010 at 3:50 am

    lol.. Nice twist in the end.

    • Maddie December 5, 2010 at 11:42 am

      Thanks Bedazzled! 🙂

  7. Lost in thoughts December 5, 2010 at 4:19 am

    This was neat…I liked it. Very good twist at the end.

    • Maddie December 5, 2010 at 11:42 am

      Thanks 🙂 Glad you liked it.

  8. Muddassir December 5, 2010 at 5:04 am

    Dude, you can submit this same post as an entry for Blogeshwar also.
    Scary too 🙂
    all in all good job

    • Maddie December 5, 2010 at 11:44 am

      Thanks Muddassir! and maybe I will submit it for Bloggerwar. 🙂

  9. Kshitij December 6, 2010 at 12:15 pm

    Okay! Now the first question I ask is if she killed them.. or was it a drug?

    This sentence is confusing – Then she went over each one of them and looked at their lying forms.

    What do you mean by lying forms?

    I think you did not do the full justice to the idea.. a number of lose ends here :0 But that’s my take and you can discard it as you read.

    • Maddie December 6, 2010 at 12:19 pm

      Hey Kshitij,

      From what I thought and wrote, she killed them. Lying forms pretty much says so. But it is open to interpretation. And thus the mystery continues. 🙂

      Thanks for going over it in details and your comment. 🙂

  10. aativas December 6, 2010 at 12:18 pm

    WoW! Liked the end of the story.. it is real Mystery!

    • Maddie December 6, 2010 at 12:20 pm

      Thanks 🙂

  11. Raksha Raman December 7, 2010 at 6:48 am

    Hello!

    Well thought! So the entire mystery didn’t unfold after all! Whether the friends are dead or no is still a mystery though the mystery of the unknown caller did unfold.

    ATB with BAT! 🙂

    • Maddie December 7, 2010 at 10:47 am

      Yes, Thanks! 🙂

  12. Beyond Horizon December 7, 2010 at 9:03 am

    nice..simple..mystery…wat abt her frnds??
    Best of luck!

    • Maddie December 7, 2010 at 10:47 am

      That’s still a mystery. 🙂

  13. Vikram Pyati December 7, 2010 at 12:16 pm

    Good one.. nice twist in the end.. though a bit short, I felt.

    • Maddie December 7, 2010 at 4:14 pm

      Thanks Vikram! 🙂

  14. Enchanta December 7, 2010 at 9:31 pm

    Always a pleasure to hit the joke as a twist in a mystery.
    I enjoyed it.

    All the best !!

    • Maddie December 8, 2010 at 9:59 am

      Thanks Enchanta, glad you liked it. 🙂

  15. Cherry Blossom December 8, 2010 at 12:11 am

    An entertaining read altogether. Loved the ending . All the best.

    • Maddie December 8, 2010 at 10:29 am

      Thanks Cherry Blossom! 🙂

  16. drpratibha December 8, 2010 at 6:30 am

    really scary and like the way mystery unfolded.
    all the best for BAT.

    • Maddie December 8, 2010 at 10:30 am

      Thanks Dr. Pratibha! 🙂

  17. drpratibha December 8, 2010 at 6:32 am

    HOPE YOU WOULD LIKE TO COMMENT ON MINE http://pratibhathetalent.blogspot.com/2010/12/mystery.html

  18. D2 December 9, 2010 at 1:44 pm

    Highly entertaining turn of events! The prank was well thought out, it seems. Nice twist to what initially seemed liked a Scream remake. 😀
    All the best for the BAT.

    • Maddie December 9, 2010 at 2:56 pm

      Thanks D2, glad you found it entertaining. 🙂

  19. Amity December 10, 2010 at 12:48 am

    I dunno what to say Maddie…but reminds me of prank calls I am receiving lately…a mystery, when I answer the phone, no one answers on the other end…

    It happens every middle of night…now your story gave me some raw fears…hopefully not what i thought of!

    Prank callers mysterious, to hell with them!

    One nice mystery story….all the best dear!!!

    • Maddie December 10, 2010 at 7:07 pm

      Hey Amity, don’t worry. Must be definitely some prank call. Happens with a lot of us.

  20. Yamini Meduri December 10, 2010 at 7:32 am

    wow that was a nicce mystery 🙂 liked this one..!!!

    All the best for BAT dear..!!!

    Yamini Meduri – The Mystery

    Yours
    Yamini Meduri

    • Maddie December 10, 2010 at 7:15 pm

      Thanks Yamini! 🙂

  21. Guria December 11, 2010 at 7:45 pm

    Drat! I dunno whether to laugh or lament!! I hope she had just given her friends a sedative not poison!! Great mystery! 🙂
    ATB for BAT17… :))

    • Maddie December 12, 2010 at 10:18 am

      Thanks Guria! 🙂

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