Return

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Kamya headed off into the surrounding suburbs. She walked through the park, past a parlour and across a cement footpath. She walked upto her front door when a sparkle caught her eye.

Kamya looked across and saw the glint of a watch as it turned and reflected sunlight. She saw her neighbour Gaurav who sat on the front doorstep listless as a daydreaming child. However he did not appear to be daydreaming and in an instant he peered at Kamya.

Kamya smiled a little and waved before turning to her door again. As she reached the door, Gaurav called her.

Gaurav: Hey.
Kamya: Hi.
Gaurav: “What’s up? Been to the parade?”
Kamya: “Yea..”
Gaurav: “Wow. was it any good?”
Kamya: “It was good.”
Gaurav: “Got any pictures?”
Holding up a camera, Kamya replied, “Sure thing.”
Gaurav: “Want to show me?”
Kamya: “Now?”
Gaurav: “Sure. Come over – we’ll have a drink.”
“Okay. I can use a drink.” Kamya smiled a little.

Gaurav met her at the front door and let her in. Kamya glanced around at the unfamiliar atmosphere.
“In here.” said Gaurav and opened the door into a dark enclave.

Kamya moved in tentatively. “It’s awfully dark.”
Gaurav closed the door and locked it. The room got darker.
Kamya turned around with a gasp as she heard the click. “There’s a light right?”

Sneaking behind her, Gaurav leaned over her ear. “I want to see those pictures now.” Kamya gulped and looked over her shoulder.
“I’ll need the light…”

Gaurav slipped the camera off her hand. He opened it and clicked it in Kamya’s face. Kamya stumbled back as the flash struck her eyes. She tripped over a footstool and fell with a thump. Gaurav scanned the picture.

He took another picture and then looked at Kamya with her skirt high over her thighs, and her legs awkwardly hanging over the stool. “You okay?”
Kamya: “Oww…”
Gaurav: “You got any other poses?”

Kamya rubbed her head and turned towards the door.
Gaurav stood in her way and said, ” There’s no out until I say there’s out.” Kamya shivered and gulped as she realised that there is no return.

Disclaimer: This is a work of fiction.

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50 responses to “Return

  1. Phoenixritu September 4, 2010 at 12:51 am

    Oh my God, dark and dangerous! I loved the edgy-ness

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:26 pm

      Thanks Ritu 🙂

  2. Rachana Shakyawar September 4, 2010 at 3:34 am

    Opps!!

    This was quite interesting…very unexpected twists, table, skirt, dark, daring, flash and tale!
    Liked it :))

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:27 pm

      Glad you liked it Rachana, all the best for BAT 🙂

  3. Someone Is Special September 4, 2010 at 4:01 am

    Interesting take… so dark…

    All the best for BAT..

    Someone Is Special

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:28 pm

      Thanks Someone! 🙂

  4. Amity September 4, 2010 at 7:42 am

    Oh, got chills…!

    This is a nice take…loved it!

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:28 pm

      Thanks Amity 🙂

  5. RiikaInfinityy 마왕 September 4, 2010 at 7:45 am

    Wow I love the darkness flowing within this story=P It is calling upon me XD~ I loving this=P Good luck on BAT!^^

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:29 pm

      Glad you liked it 🙂

  6. Sid September 4, 2010 at 10:15 am

    oh dear, the story gave me shudders. Great writing.

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:29 pm

      Thanks Sid! 🙂 All the best for BAT.

  7. Dreamer September 4, 2010 at 1:21 pm

    Oooh! Will you walk into my parlor says the spider to the fly, eh? Scary! Kind of like those slasher movies! Liked it!

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:30 pm

      Thanks Dreamer 🙂 Best luck with BAT.

  8. magiceye September 4, 2010 at 8:48 pm

    shirt, crisp and gripping!

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:31 pm

      Thanks Magiceye. 🙂

  9. Jaspreet September 4, 2010 at 9:48 pm

    It was scary!!! :O
    Liked your take on the topic! Also, it was not too lengthy unlike most fictitious stories are.
    All the best!

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:33 pm

      Thanks Jaspreet. Lengthy stories sometimes tend to get boring. 🙂

  10. Ms.Meduri September 5, 2010 at 12:08 am

    dark tale…rightly written..!!!

    Y does this happen to girls all the time?? I wonder…dont the boys understand trust..!!!

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:34 pm

      Thanks Ms. Meduri. Some girls trust readily and take people at face value.

  11. Manna September 5, 2010 at 7:10 am

    Lovedddddddddd it.. It was just brilliant.. Nice twist.. All the very best.. 🙂

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:35 pm

      Thanks Manna. Happy that you lovedddddddddd it 🙂

  12. kevinyide September 5, 2010 at 5:49 pm

    aau lolita !…hahaha.. i had no clue it would turn out like it did. awesome!

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:35 pm

      Thanks Kevin 🙂 Thought of Shakti Kapoor did you? 🙂

  13. Samadrita September 5, 2010 at 6:49 pm

    Ooh at one point I thought this was veering towards erotica. I hope the guy doesn’t plan to sell her nude pictures.. 😦
    All the best for BAT!

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:36 pm

      Sell her nude pics? ha..ha.. hmmm maybe I should write a sequel. But no, no erotica from me 🙂

  14. Md Muddassir Shah September 5, 2010 at 7:17 pm

    Hey
    that was a nice one.
    keep writing 🙂

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:37 pm

      Thanks Muddassir 🙂

  15. mahesh kalaal September 6, 2010 at 1:05 am

    The vicious return

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:37 pm

      Yea! 🙂 Something different!

  16. Brijender September 6, 2010 at 1:38 pm

    A dark and foreboding end to what could have been a very cheeky story had he just grinned when he uttered those last words.
    But leaves an impact nonetheless.

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:37 pm

      Thanks Brijender 🙂

  17. tikulicious September 6, 2010 at 2:02 pm

    I love dark stories. yours is awesome
    Beautiful take on Return
    Best for BAT

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:38 pm

      Thanks Tikuli. Glad you liked it 🙂

  18. D2 September 6, 2010 at 11:44 pm

    Even I thought this was getting erotic! Nice plot. Well laid out.
    All the best for BAT.

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:38 pm

      Thanks D2 🙂 No erotica there.

  19. Kshitij September 7, 2010 at 11:56 am

    Naaaise, I say.

    Initially I thought they were young kids…
    but yeh toh…

    I think she should not have entered if it was that dark. But wondering if the darkness did her or Gaurav.

    • Maddie September 7, 2010 at 6:39 pm

      Thanks Kshitij. Sometimes we act before we think.

  20. Zainab Urooj September 8, 2010 at 5:52 am

    Short and sweet is always of my interest. Its good.

    • Maddie September 9, 2010 at 2:22 pm

      Thanks Zainab 🙂

  21. Karthik September 8, 2010 at 10:53 am

    That was spooky. Didn’t really expect that in the end. Well written. All the best!

    • Maddie September 9, 2010 at 2:23 pm

      Thanks Karthik. 🙂 All the best to you too!

  22. Parul Jain September 8, 2010 at 10:12 pm

    Wow, didn’t see that coming !!
    Nice one !!
    All the best

    • Maddie September 9, 2010 at 2:23 pm

      Thanks Parul. Glad you liked it 🙂

  23. sweta September 9, 2010 at 2:13 pm

    good one!! I was expecting it to go further….. but it was short and gave the msg clearly….

    • Maddie September 9, 2010 at 2:24 pm

      Thanks Sweta. I felt making it longer would be boring.

  24. Shilpa Garg September 11, 2010 at 10:56 pm

    Oooh!! That’s a scary one!! Liked it!
    Cheers 🙂

    • Maddie September 13, 2010 at 9:49 pm

      Thanks Shilpa 🙂

  25. Swayambhu Mukherjee September 12, 2010 at 7:24 pm

    crazy n scary!!!

    • Maddie September 13, 2010 at 9:49 pm

      Thanks 🙂

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