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She wiped her eyes and stared at the stick. Two lines. It was positive. She knew her parents wouldn’t understand. Her boyfriend had broken up with her yesterday. Her graduation exams were coming up next week.

She craddled the bottle of sleeping pills in her hands.

“Goodbye”, she whispered as tears trickled down her cheeks.

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62 thoughts on “Goodbye

    1. Maddie Post author

      Hi Meg, welcome to my blog.

      Yea she could have said goodbye to the baby but maybe she found that too difficult and instead thought ending her life might be best for all.

  1. sidrasayeed

    hmm…I’ve a hard time understanding how people can convey a story in such a short format. You’ve done just FINE πŸ™‚

  2. Tavish {Sensible Bakwas}

    Touching F55. Although, it lacked the unexpected twist which is usually an important ingrediant of a fiction 55. Anyways thats ok till the reader is able to get what u r saying and that was nicely in ur story…. all the best for BAT!

    1. adreamygal

      Short yet spoke lot ..

      A common picture presented neatly .. I liked that ‘two line’ thingy …Quiet a different take ! πŸ™‚

      All the best for BATOM πŸ™‚

    1. Maddie Post author

      Hey Nethra, Welcome to my blog.

      Hmmm.. she could have aborted the baby. Maybe she was too overwhelmed with the circumstances or too depressed.

      ATB for BATOM πŸ™‚

    1. Maddie Post author

      Thanks Ritu. Welcome to my blog. I am regular visiter to your lovely blog though I never comment. πŸ™‚ Am really glad to visited mine. ATB for BATOM πŸ™‚

  3. Gyanban

    Writing a story with a begining middle and end in 55 words is a difficult task.Often times the clincher is the twist.
    In your story I think the scene construct was well etched, however it needed an unpredictable end.
    A good effort nevertheless.

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