Goodbye

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 13; the thirteenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.

She wiped her eyes and stared at the stick. Two lines. It was positive. She knew her parents wouldn’t understand. Her boyfriend had broken up with her yesterday. Her graduation exams were coming up next week.

She craddled the bottle of sleeping pills in her hands.

“Goodbye”, she whispered as tears trickled down her cheeks.

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62 responses to “Goodbye

  1. gkam August 7, 2010 at 12:47 am

    Well composed 55fiction. Start to finish and the consequence.

    All the best!
    Gkam- Goodbye

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 2:53 pm

      Thanks. Welcome to my blog. Loved your post on Mumbai. πŸ™‚

  2. Vikas Khair August 7, 2010 at 6:40 am

    aww so sad but so true all the best for BAT-13

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 2:54 pm

      Thanks Vikas!

  3. Leo August 7, 2010 at 9:43 am

    hi Maddie, short yet poignant 55 fiction. well written πŸ™‚

    ATB for BATOM

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 2:55 pm

      Thanks Leo. ATB to you too. You have a very gripping story there for BATOM.

  4. Jaspreet August 7, 2010 at 11:25 am

    Hard hitting!

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 2:55 pm

      Hey Jaspreet. It’s a sad reality.

  5. vibhuti August 7, 2010 at 12:32 pm

    A suicidal goodbye!
    A harshly true to life 55er…
    Good one..:)

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:11 pm

      Hey Vibhuti welcome to my blog. Thanks πŸ™‚

  6. Leo August 7, 2010 at 3:15 pm

    harsh, but it is something that happens a lot..

    well written.. all the best for BATOM..

  7. Dreamer August 7, 2010 at 5:58 pm

    So much said in so few words! A truly remarkable 55-er. All the best for BAT 13.

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:12 pm

      Thanks dreamer πŸ™‚

  8. megzone August 7, 2010 at 6:02 pm

    ishhh..!!!tragic..
    better wud have been abortion.. why suicide…
    she cud have got the kid aborted and said Goodbye baby..!! πŸ™„

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:13 pm

      Hi Meg, welcome to my blog.

      Yea she could have said goodbye to the baby but maybe she found that too difficult and instead thought ending her life might be best for all.

  9. pushpee August 7, 2010 at 7:51 pm

    Aw!! too young, at such news she must be in fright
    and in ur 55ers you expressed it right..ATB
    :))

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 2:56 pm

      Thanks Pushpee. Welcome to my blog.

  10. pushpee August 7, 2010 at 7:52 pm

    too young she must have been in fright
    and in your poem you expressed it just right
    ATB :))

  11. pushpee August 7, 2010 at 7:53 pm

    oo young she must have been in fright
    and in your poem you expressed it just right
    ATB :))

  12. Shweta August 7, 2010 at 9:10 pm

    happens…alot…nicely put up..

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 2:57 pm

      Hey Shweta. Welcome to my blog. thanks πŸ™‚

  13. sidrasayeed August 7, 2010 at 11:12 pm

    hmm…I’ve a hard time understanding how people can convey a story in such a short format. You’ve done just FINE πŸ™‚

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 2:57 pm

      Hey sidrasayeed, welcome to my blog. It was my first serious attempt at writing 55-er. Thannks πŸ™‚

  14. Tavish {Sensible Bakwas} August 8, 2010 at 4:25 am

    Touching F55. Although, it lacked the unexpected twist which is usually an important ingrediant of a fiction 55. Anyways thats ok till the reader is able to get what u r saying and that was nicely in ur story…. all the best for BAT!

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 2:59 pm

      Hey Tavish, welcome to my blog. I’ll try to twist it next time. Thanks and ATB for BAT.

  15. Someone Is Special August 8, 2010 at 7:55 am

    Well very composed 55-Fiction.. Do give it g-man, he will love it.. Goodbye in a sucidal attempt..

    All The Best for BAT 13.

    Do stop by Gmsaravana – Goodbye

    If you wish to save a heart, then do stop by Save a Heart! Initiative. Do take the pledge and vote if you wish..

    Yours Frendly,
    Someone Is Special

    • adreamygal August 8, 2010 at 4:11 pm

      Short yet spoke lot ..

      A common picture presented neatly .. I liked that ‘two line’ thingy …Quiet a different take ! πŸ™‚

      All the best for BATOM πŸ™‚

      • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:00 pm

        Thanks Dreamgal, welcome to my blog. Glad you liked it. πŸ™‚ Best luck for BATOM πŸ™‚

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 2:59 pm

      Thanks Saravana. ATB to you too.

  16. Nethra August 8, 2010 at 6:00 pm

    She should have thought of abortion…why suicide?
    Anyway it was a nice 55er.
    All the best for BAT! :)l

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:02 pm

      Hey Nethra, Welcome to my blog.

      Hmmm.. she could have aborted the baby. Maybe she was too overwhelmed with the circumstances or too depressed.

      ATB for BATOM πŸ™‚

  17. Vee.. August 9, 2010 at 2:38 am

    exactly opposite to my take on Goodbye. Well crafted 55er. πŸ™‚

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:03 pm

      Hi Vee, welcome to my blog.

      Yup! all the best for BATOM πŸ™‚

  18. vilas August 9, 2010 at 3:10 am

    Great piece.Very well said.You have won the competition as far as I am concerned.

  19. Harsha Chittar August 9, 2010 at 8:42 am

    Well written. I always admire people who can write 55 fiction. Good one!

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:06 pm

      Thanks Harsha. Welcome to my blog.

  20. Shahid August 9, 2010 at 11:01 am

    A great 55er….and very clear too…usually most people do not understand…but this was very very clear

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:07 pm

      Thanks Shahid, welcome to my blog. Glad you liked it. πŸ™‚

  21. Amity August 9, 2010 at 11:41 am

    too poignant! but goodbyes are always sad though expressed in different ways!

    i like your rake here…:)

    ATB for BAT!

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:08 pm

      Hey Amity, welcome to my blog. Glad you liked my 55-er. ATB to you too πŸ™‚

  22. phoenixritu August 9, 2010 at 11:56 am

    Harsh, very real and excellently written. Wow

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:09 pm

      Thanks Ritu. Welcome to my blog. I am regular visiter to your lovely blog though I never comment. πŸ™‚ Am really glad to visited mine. ATB for BATOM πŸ™‚

  23. mahesh kalaal August 9, 2010 at 12:21 pm

    pragmatic and a happening tragic …
    keep expressing

    • Maddie August 9, 2010 at 3:10 pm

      Thanks Mahesh, welcome to my blog. ATB for BATOM.

  24. Adarsh Sharma August 9, 2010 at 5:31 pm

    This hit me like a stinger missile…so short but so damn effective…

    • Maddie August 11, 2010 at 12:50 pm

      Thanks Adarsh, gald you liked it πŸ™‚

  25. Vikram Pyati August 10, 2010 at 10:47 am

    Quite poignant… but somehow I did not like the ending….very sad

    • Maddie August 11, 2010 at 12:51 pm

      Thanks Vikram, will try to make it a happy ending next time πŸ™‚

  26. Vipul Grover August 10, 2010 at 3:53 pm

    A well written and balanced 55 Fiction.. nice wrk πŸ™‚

    • Maddie August 11, 2010 at 12:51 pm

      Thanks Vipul, keep visiting πŸ™‚

  27. Rinaya August 11, 2010 at 1:17 am

    Nice one! πŸ™‚ Realistic & heart-touching.Goodluck fro BAT13!

    • Maddie August 11, 2010 at 12:51 pm

      Thanks Rinaya πŸ™‚

  28. Gyanban August 13, 2010 at 8:26 am

    Writing a story with a begining middle and end in 55 words is a difficult task.Often times the clincher is the twist.
    In your story I think the scene construct was well etched, however it needed an unpredictable end.
    A good effort nevertheless.

    • Maddie August 16, 2010 at 3:33 am

      Thanks Gyanban, will try to twist it better next time πŸ™‚

  29. Sid August 13, 2010 at 9:31 pm

    Oh dear, you picked up a most dangerous topic ever present. Teen pregnancy has the darkest shade of gray amongst all!!!

    Cheers,
    Sid
    Holy cow!!! Did you know…

    • Maddie August 16, 2010 at 3:32 am

      Hi Sid. It’s a harsh reality. Nice comic strips you have there on your site. πŸ™‚

  30. Guddu August 14, 2010 at 4:08 pm

    Very good 55 fiction.. I can never deliver a message so perfectly in such less words.. All da best πŸ™‚

    http://www.frescobyme.blogspot.com

    • Maddie August 16, 2010 at 3:30 am

      Thanks Guddu πŸ™‚

  31. Hiyaa August 15, 2010 at 11:37 pm

    Surely well composed story! All the best! Here after ages Maddie! Cheers
    Sandy

    • Maddie August 16, 2010 at 3:29 am

      Thanks Sandy, and keep visiting. πŸ™‚

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  33. Psych Babbler January 10, 2012 at 3:21 am

    Nice one Maddie! I really enjoyed that…

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